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    dots Submission Name: Forever Yoursdots

    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This is a poem i wrote about an ex friend. It was written a few months ago just thought i'd see what people thought of it.

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    dotsForever Yoursdots

    I wish I could explain to you
    To see what you'd do
    But you arn't my friend
    better off your my foe
    You say i was never a friend but whats true
    No matter what happened I stood by you
    Willing to be the captin of the ship
    I went down with you if you'd wished
    You turned friends against me
    How much did they charge you as a fee?
    But i only know of one friend
    Whos willing to take you back

    Submitted on 2004-07-22 16:20:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this one. its really good. as i said i will look forward to reading your work. good job dont ever stop writing
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by natasha | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. I also had an experience like this, except I described it as a crucifixition! This is simple, yet it has a lot of undertone's that we don't know about. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I like how you describe being a true friend, saying you'd be captain of their ship. and I like how the write describes what "Friends" are really like, they'll stab you in the back in heartbeat. very good.
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]

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