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    dots Submission Name: little bitchdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 301
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 524
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1638



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    dotslittle bitchdots
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    gimme da future da past wont last
    if im movin too fast
    its cuz im lookin for cash
    if you cant handle that
    thats too bad
    cuz im stacked
    and if you cant see that its cuz your style is wack

    from a bitches point of view i aint shit
    but let me tell you little bitch
    i wont quit
    so it dont matter what you think of me you just better think quick
    this shit i got from you aint nothin but yor still thinkin your slick
    now who aint shit
    you little bitch
    i think its time you learn to spit
    cuz if you tried to battle me with some of my written shit
    you better admit that you aint nothin but a trick

    death metal raw bitches
    dancin moshin in the pit
    i dont quit cuz im the shit
    and your nothin but a selfish bitch
    self righteous trick
    use your faggot ass lips
    to suck a dick
    and get passed like a blunt around the pit
    youve been blunted
    mcblunted
    im only stuntin
    mcshitty
    this shit aint nothin pretty
    im so filthy dripped
    im dipped
    ive been lipped
    but youve been pimped
    by a bitch
    thats me your lady asshole fantasy
    surrounded by tragedy
    you still couldnt handle me
    you still couldnt imagine the demon in me
    the diseased will all scream at me
    and try to be pure like me
    but cant handle my purity
    a thousand versus later you still wont believe in me
    but my mastering
    are still raw to me




    Submitted on 2010-01-15 15:40:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the title says it

    but i would if you want to keep the vulgarities
    or profane words
    focus on the concrete that objectify them with the adjectives that go along with them in the phrase
    or line
    by doing this
    might
    help focus on the idea of the rawness of the words
    and not the vulgarity of the profanity
    focus on the usage not the words meanings
    otherwise leave them out and use real words
    you know words
    [censored]
    i forgot that i wanted to say
    the profane in poetry keeps the poem from ever saying anything other than [censored] [censored] or damn word
    [censored] :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-16 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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