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    dots Submission Name: Thrown Awaydots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 642
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThrown Awaydots
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    I open my eyes
    Iíve never felt this pain
    And now I have to face
    That Iíve been replaced
    Itíll never be the same

    (Iíve been thrown away)

    I open my hands
    And never felt so cold
    Iím left here all alone
    Acing at my bones
    I canít help but to fold

    (Iíve been thrown away)

    Canít open my heart
    Cause Iím feeling so lost
    Nothing left to show
    Got no where to go
    To the dark I was tossed

    Feeling like solid stone
    Now that sheís gone
    Sheíll never stay
    My heart thrown away
    (She threw me away)
    (Iíve been thrown away)

    I raise my eyes
    Feel it in my veins
    All these falling tears
    From my every fear
    Sitting out in the rain

    (Iíve been thrown away)

    I clench my hands
    Drowning in memories
    Iíll never forget
    All that I regret
    Now Ií my own enemy

    (Iíve been thrown away)

    I open my chest
    Seeing that its empty
    Nothing there living
    No heart thatís beating
    Now Iím going crazy

    Now Iím scared
    When she goes to ask me back
    But I donít care
    Even when sheís stabs me in the back
    Cause Iím already gone
    Have been all along
    (she threw me away)
    (Iíve been thrown away)

    (Iíve been thrown away)





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    ||| Comments |||
      This song made me think of the band stabbing westward. I guess my meaning behind it is that the lyrics are structured in such a way that itd be easy to do a sweet beat to this, but in all honesty, the overall concept is a bit clichť. It has however spiked my interest in reading some of your other work, to find out if its more the same, or if more original pieces allow you to show off your natural rhythm.
    | Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      I FINALLY FOUND THIS SITE. Well as usual the poem is excellent if somewhat depressing LOL. fyi this is Tasha
    | Posted on 2010-01-15 00:00:00 | by ShelteredRain | [ Reply to This ]


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