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How am I to feel?

Author: faideddarkness
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
Elite Ratio:    6.5 - 102 /56 /52
Words: 177
Class/Type: Lyrics /Depressed
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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How am I to feel?

I open my eyes
Ive never felt this pain
And now I have to face
Feelings of being replaced
Itll never be the same

I open my hands
And never felt so cold
Im left here all alone
Aching at my bones
I cant help but to fold

Cant open my heart
Cause Im feeling so lost
Nothing left to hold
With no where to go
Into the darkness I'm tossed

I raise my eyes
Feel it in my veins
All these falling tears
From my every fear
While sitting in the rain

I clench my hands
Drowning in memories
Ill never forget
All that I regret
My new found enemy

I open my chest
Seeing that its empty
Nothing there living
No heart thats beating
Am I going crazy

Now Im scared
When she goes to ask me back
But I dont care
Even when shes stabs me in the back

What am I
What am I to do
How am I to feel

Submitted on 2010-01-15 18:18:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This song made me think of the band stabbing westward. I guess my meaning behind it is that the lyrics are structured in such a way that itd be easy to do a sweet beat to this, but in all honesty, the overall concept is a bit cliché. It has however spiked my interest in reading some of your other work, to find out if its more the same, or if more original pieces allow you to show off your natural rhythm.
| Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
  I FINALLY FOUND THIS SITE. Well as usual the poem is excellent if somewhat depressing LOL. fyi this is Tasha
| Posted on 2010-01-15 00:00:00 | by ShelteredRain | [ Reply to This ]

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