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    dots Submission Name: How am I to feel?dots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 765
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1098



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    dots How am I to feel?dots
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    I open my eyes
    Ive never felt this pain
    And now I have to face
    Feelings of being replaced
    Itll never be the same

    I open my hands
    And never felt so cold
    Im left here all alone
    Aching at my bones
    I cant help but to fold

    Cant open my heart
    Cause Im feeling so lost
    Nothing left to hold
    With no where to go
    Into the darkness I'm tossed

    I raise my eyes
    Feel it in my veins
    All these falling tears
    From my every fear
    While sitting in the rain

    I clench my hands
    Drowning in memories
    Ill never forget
    All that I regret
    My new found enemy

    I open my chest
    Seeing that its empty
    Nothing there living
    No heart thats beating
    Am I going crazy

    Now Im scared
    When she goes to ask me back
    But I dont care
    Even when shes stabs me in the back

    What am I
    What am I to do
    How am I to feel




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    ||| Comments |||
      This song made me think of the band stabbing westward. I guess my meaning behind it is that the lyrics are structured in such a way that itd be easy to do a sweet beat to this, but in all honesty, the overall concept is a bit cliché. It has however spiked my interest in reading some of your other work, to find out if its more the same, or if more original pieces allow you to show off your natural rhythm.
    | Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      I FINALLY FOUND THIS SITE. Well as usual the poem is excellent if somewhat depressing LOL. fyi this is Tasha
    | Posted on 2010-01-15 00:00:00 | by ShelteredRain | [ Reply to This ]


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