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    dots Submission Name: Is This A Dream?dots
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    Author: Gunforhire
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 1/5/8
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Another 'I can't sleep' Poem. xD

    thank you and enjoy


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    dotsIs This A Dream?dots
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    Sleep won't grace my soul
    Visions haunt me
    They distort my reality
    Twisting fantasy and fate
    Into a nightmareish creature

    My eyes drip with crimson tears
    Yet still the Sandman does not visit
    He sits with a smirk
    Watching my anguish with baited breath
    Waiting for me to break

    Silence does not drown out the voices
    Their siren's call leads me
    It brings me to my knees
    Taunting my every mistake
    Beating my ears to a pulp

    A nightmare is what I live in
    Monsters maul me at every turn
    Shadows begin to close in
    My breath becomes nothing but a shutter
    Is there a light at the end of this tunnel?




    Submitted on 2010-01-15 19:00:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you know sleep is over rated anyway but as for the monsters you have your pen and everyone knows the pen is mightier than the sword
    | Posted on 2010-01-15 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      funny that i couldnt sleep and decided to read poetry to find this. ehehhe .. anyway ...
    overall very descriptive.. the sandman was a good touch ...
    my favorite would be the third stanza.. but in the end of the poem i cant understand how there's a light in the end of the tunnel ... didnt seem to make sense.
    However, don't change anything. It is what it is and it shouldnt be changed.
    Hope u fall asleep soon
    | Posted on 2010-01-15 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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