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    dots Submission Name: Let It Go!dots
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    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Bytes: 337



    Description:
       This is written about an exboyfriend mainly i guess waht it is, is a memory that i didn't want anymore.


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    dotsLet It Go!dots
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    A picture of you
    A picture of me

    A picture of us
    when we were we

    The picture of long ago
    I still hold to be so

    But no matter what I say
    Our feelings changed in every way

    From touch to kiss
    From face to lips

    Let it go!!




    Submitted on 2004-07-22 16:22:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked the beginin but you cut it off to quikly athte end, you could of explained more on why u dont want that memoruy no more, i liked it
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by ALURIO | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the beginin but you cut it off to quikly athte end, you could of explained more on why u dont want that memoruy no more, i liked it
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by ALURIO | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm very short and sweet. Its ok but very plain and simple. There is not really very much depth to it, its just sort of you know, oh past ex relationship, in your face sort of thing. The word and vocabulary you used is kind of blunt. But hey, poetry isnt meant to be taken too seriously, if you wrote it, then its an achievement, so keep writing and in time you will progress. Nice one, keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by freak_like_me | [ Reply to This ]


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