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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Silencerdots
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    Author: Little Gal
    ASL Info:    20 female, Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 469/431/94
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
    Total Views: 640
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    dotsMr. Silencerdots
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    As of now on,
    your name is officially changed.
    You are Mr. Silencer,
    he who silences the bullets of pain out of my words.

    I have come to realize,
    that no amount of pain is enough.
    No amount of words begging, weeping to be expressed;
    could ever escape your super powers.

    Inevitable as it is,
    my words turn to steam.
    The only sounds i hear are screams inside of me.
    The only thing you do, is silence me.
    So into the black my silent screams will fade.
    As Mr. Silencer sees through,
    that the job is done.




    Submitted on 2010-01-15 20:17:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this. I knew it was gonna be good from the title but you did a better job than what I expected with the concept. The last lines tie everything together nicely.

    Good writing!
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      The rhythm of this poem is great:) It flows fantastically! The concept of everything is just wonderful, and I wouldn't have thought about this myself ever. The vocabulary use is quite good, and these idea's you come up with in your poems are very unique. Very original piece of writing, I have never read anything with the same concept even close. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading. Keep it up, dear:D

    Abbie,
    x x x x x
    | Posted on 2010-01-18 00:00:00 | by smexybabe0101 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the feel of this poem....
    i got hung up on the idea of bullets of my words and silencing pain, but i liked the poem
    it seemed heartfelt...
    some people like to know things for themselves too much....
    | Posted on 2010-01-15 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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