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    dots Submission Name: Little Ashantidots

    Author: MrBear
    ASL Info:    19/M/Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 59/109/48
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsLittle Ashantidots

    I live in a place you might visit,
    A place, to you, where the people are peasants,
    Where wars are waged and some are slaves -
    For a child growing up, my life is not pleasant.

    I live in a village
    Far away from you -
    Where warlords still pillage
    And Cecil Rhodes rode through.

    Where missionaries meddle with the stories they tell -
    And we worship some God without any choice --

    But life was sweet when I heard her voice.

    Her name was Little Ashanti,
    She would pick up a twig and sing,
    She was twelve........ And I was shy -
    I would watch as her voice would ring.

    “See my days are cold without you, but I'm hurting while I'm with you,
    And while my heart can't take no more, I keep on running back to you.”

    We would pretend she was an American star,
    I was her audience 'til our parents cried from afar,
    “It's getting late!” - But in our native tongue,
    I began to miss the song she sung

    But we're just kids, who have dreams and play,
    So I wrote her name so her fame could stay
    But overnight she lost it all --
    Her name was blown away.

    Submitted on 2010-01-15 21:25:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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