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    dots Submission Name: who goes out and counts the green on grass...dots

    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotswho goes out and counts the green on grass...dots

    ignition orange crabmeat

    introductions are always aside
    or over too quickly with impressions
    i think because of expectations and futility
    something about the future and the inevitability of failure
    like death and dying
    finality brings the mind to the moment
    then worthlessness sends it back to forever

    instant gratification is too soon
    judgment isnít
    the world on earth shows up ghetto bump
    prophesy and dream color written by Henry Rollins on roach wings
    and the old mirrors, hallucinogens and ghosts

    import of the senses
    post industry infrastructure
    theocratic monarchy
    fifty-fifty fascism and idealistic law
    immediacy and consistency
    blind partisans
    the media
    somehow back into opinion
    a pin cushion of right and justice
    ethics and moral reason

    all of the forgotten in an amalgamation of life like metastasized lung
    moments and cigarettes soldier

    addiction stoned and simple
    lost self and lost places
    find a penny
    pay for something
    drop a penny
    action in word
    poems and pennies
    action in world
    useless without meaning
    forethought and inclusion to calculation
    goodnight microphone pitch
    standing up and spewing guts out ainít spit

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