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    dots Submission Name: Wordsdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 673
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Words can not express these emotions
    That seem to be kentling themselves
    Within this soul of mine.
    Words are no longer what hold my sanity
    For I believe I've lost that.
    Its been sometime since I could remember when I was sane...
    Its been too long to remember the last time
    I was truly happy..
    uh, its too late now
    Its been done
    They are digesting within this body that awaits its reaction...
    Its too late now
    For I have consumed what is loafly mine to begin with..
    What I ran to for cover
    I can no longer run too
    For the pain has found those places,
    Can't you see...?
    I am starting over..
    and I'll need your help.
    So hold me when your near,
    Wipe these tears when you can
    and calm me down for when your far.

    Submitted on 2010-01-17 23:20:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-01-19 00:00:00 | by Bones | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd change your to YOU'RE in the third to last line, but other than that...all I have to say is 'yup!'

    | Posted on 2010-01-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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