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    dots Submission Name: A Lie & Green Eyesdots
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    Author: lechuga
    ASL Info:    16\M\NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 7/15/27
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsA Lie & Green Eyesdots
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    Repulsive & appealing
    I reach for what I know I will push away
    Simple hypocracy, at its finest
    Two grains of ocean sand
    Small, but very significant
    Taken
    With every fragment of your thought,
    Directed at myself or not,
    Embedded in the flesh of my ideas
    Reminders of the reasons why:
    A Lie, & Green Eyes.




    Submitted on 2010-01-18 15:43:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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