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    dots Submission Name: every other fooldots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 334
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1855



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    dotsevery other fooldots
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    you aint shit but a funky ass bitch
    dont get tricked
    dont get your neck split
    dont try to be slick
    eat a dick
    eat a clit
    wait for me to steal your clique
    and be the shit
    and while your minds still thick
    your gonna slip
    so fuck you bitch
    dont try to talk shit
    youll get hit
    youll get knocked the fuck down
    and make a clown
    come to town
    and be down
    for the block
    where you got shot
    cuz the game never stops
    the story wont end here
    not now were near
    enough to bring out the fear
    in the tough
    to put a limp in the buff
    cuz im callin your bluff
    your a punk
    and youre stuck
    in your own life
    so you gotta think twice
    about me and my heart tearing knife
    ill kill you just like every other dude
    every other fool
    every other manly shaped tool
    you wanna duel
    cuz you always talk about gettin schoolled
    you always think your styles new
    you always think i love you too
    but its not true
    and if the feelings mutual
    then be prepared to get tutored
    in a new style
    a new file
    in your cabinet of lies
    your cabinet of failed tries
    broken lines
    and lost lives
    closures and last courses
    becoming first choices
    not being able to love you
    to trust you
    to know you
    more than your old school
    and your preschool ways
    create high school days
    when we all start moving on
    and getting stronger
    and living longer
    while the other die younger
    though happier
    with every fading year
    the end is always near




    Submitted on 2010-01-18 21:34:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      clowns laugh...
    rap isn't dead...
    | Posted on 2010-01-18 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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