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    dots Submission Name: I just needed a daydots
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    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsI just needed a daydots
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    I thought I would give up,
    Give up on writing,
    Give up on life,
    But you helped me,
    Help me see what I was doing was,
    Not only hurting me,
    But hurting everyone I hold so dearly.

    So as I cry out all the emotions,
    The emotions that I kept in side,
    I see what you were saying,
    I understand what was said,
    So now I have changed,
    Changed too see the goodness in everyone,

    So please don't judge me,
    You don't even know me,
    So I'll love whom I choose,
    And hate you....





    Submitted on 2010-01-18 21:59:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know, i read this more like plain speech than poetry. It's not really because of the words used, there is no special rule or anything regarding what words should be used or not. But it's the logic behind it. You wanted to say something and you accomplished that. You did it in a poetic manner? I don't think so.

    Try to find your own language, your own set of logic. Poetry is not a vehicle, not a vent, you have to give something to the reader in return for the time spent...
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      i hope its not pointed, at the reader, that is horror...
    boo...
    but rebellion in criticism is the construct that is change...
    | Posted on 2010-01-18 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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