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    dots Submission Name: Take out the soul and what do you get?dots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTake out the soul and what do you get?dots
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    Both alarm clocks are ringing, but you’re already awake
    Listen to the radio and sing away
    You check in the mirror, and have to do a retake
    Wasted your life in the form of a shadow play


    Take out the soul and what do you get
    Living your life in emotional debt
    Take out the soul and what is left
    If this is your life then you’ve been bereft

    Singing a song until it hurts to breathe
    The clouds are black and the sky is slate grey
    How much life are you prepared to leave?
    Wasted your life in the form of a shadow play


    Take out the soul and what do you get
    Living your life in emotional debt
    Take out the soul and what is left
    If this is your life then you’ve been bereft

    Take out the soul and what do you get
    Living your life in emotional debt
    Take out the soul and what is left
    If this is your life then you’ve been bereft




    Submitted on 2010-01-18 23:48:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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