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    dots Submission Name: EVERY TIME I LOOK AT YOUdots
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    Author: Bones
    ASL Info:    40/M/ALABAMA
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 11/10/18
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 682
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    Bytes: 1140



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    dotsEVERY TIME I LOOK AT YOUdots
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    EVERY TIME I LOOK AT YOU,
    I WANA BREAK DOWN AND CRY;
    YOU`R EVERY THING THAT I`M LOOKING FOR,
    YOU`R EVERY THING THAT I`VE ALWAYS WANTED;
    YOU`R EVERY THING I`LL EVER NEED AND SO MUCH MORE.
    HOW COULD I EVER ASK GOD FOR ANYONE AS BEAUTIFUL AS YOU,
    HE HAS GIVEN ME MORE THAN I HAVE EVER DESERVED IN LIFE;
    JUST TO LOOK INTO YOUR EYES IS LIKE HEAVEN TO ME.
    THERE COULD NEVER BE ANYONE THAT COULD TAKE YOUR PLACE,
    YOU ARE THE ONE THAT I`VE BEEN LOOKING FOR;
    YOU`R THE ONLY ONE THAT COULD EVER BE FOR ME,
    AS I TAKE YOU`R HAND;
    I`LL HOLD IT CLOSE TO ME,
    I`LL NEVER LET YOU GO,
    FOR YOU MEAN THE WORLD TO ME.
    WHY DOES THINGS HAVE TO BE SO HAD FOR ME,
    SEEM I`VE LOOKED FOR SO VERY LONG;
    TRYING TO FIND SOMEONE THAT LOVES ME LIKE YOU DO,
    IF WE COULD GO BACK IN TIME KNOWING WHAT WE KNOW NOW;
    WE COULD HAVE BEEN HAPPY SO LONG AGO,
    BUT BE FOR WE GO TO THAT HEAVENLY HOME ABOVE;
    I JUST WANT TO TELL ONE LAST TIME,
    JUST HOW MUCH I LOVE. BABY I LOVE YOU!!

    WRITTEN BY: WILLIAM D THOMPSON JR




    Submitted on 2010-01-19 00:10:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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