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    dots Submission Name: Unwanted, Mistreated, Useddots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 310
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    dotsUnwanted, Mistreated, Useddots
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    Looking back at my childhood
    I see that I was nothing more than a scape goat
    I see now that nobody had my best interest in mind

    A toy to my Step Father I was
    (with strings attached)
    He's use me for his sick pleasures
    While buying my silence
    Telling me the things he knew I want/needed to hear
    Taking advantage of my innocence
    & essentially taking my innocence away!

    Nobody cared of my feelings care for me
    Nobody told me to RUN
    To hide... Where to go
    All they care about was using me to get what they all needed/wanted

    Someone to control...
    My Mother found me to be entertaining
    Always trying to make me out to be something I wasn't
    Using me to get the material items she so longed for & felt she deserved

    I was simply the ROBE between the two of them!
    Tug-A-Way

    Step Father VS Mother


    To my Biological Father
    I was an unwanted child
    One Whom never wanted or thought of
    Yet I shed numerous tears for this man who was My Father
    He only showed up when he felt like it
    Unpredictable
    Even more so when he left
    And NOT just for
    Days
    Weeks
    Months
    But several years on end

    Needless to say all I was and all I'll ever be is an
    unwanted,mistreated, & used child
    longing for a father figure
    I was never meant to have




    Submitted on 2010-01-19 19:35:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very sad, and evocative. I am sure that many many people will relate to this write. Well done to you for sitting down and putting it to paper.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2010-03-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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