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    dots Submission Name: One Wish dots

    Author: alyssafrench16
    ASL Info:    17/f/inherroomville
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 8/22/19
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsOne Wish dots

    If I ask you to kiss me good morning,
    or kiss me good night,
    I know you'd kiss me until everything's alright.

    But if I had one wish,
    or magic lamp,
    I'd wish for you to survive that crash.

    It's hard not to hear you voice anymore,
    and my heart will always be torn,
    but the gently breeze whispers promises of once more.

    Memories are all I have left,
    until one day when I walk along
    the golden bridge where you have gone.

    Submitted on 2010-01-19 19:50:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lyssy.... how long has it been since Aido told you that he loved you? cause Aido loves Lyssy.. in a friendly way... ^_^ but... Aido loves you all the same.. :3

    I really liked this because I kinda went through losing someone (not them dying...) and it kinda made me feel like this... the ending gave me goosebumps... >.> <.< where is the [censored] like button on this? *looks around for it..*
    | Posted on 2010-01-20 00:00:00 | by Aido | [ Reply to This ]

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