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    dots Submission Name: the essence of beautydots
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    Author: Little Gal
    ASL Info:    20 female, Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 469/431/94
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       different views of beauty..


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    The selfish arrogant rich man.
    Walks everyday gazing at his own treasures,
    counting his every penny.
    Staring at himself in the mirror.
    Of all thing he could buy,
    the essence of beauty lies within himself.

    The sobbing molested child,
    lived most of her life in pain.
    So much pain could only bring apathy.
    She cuts her self to realize she feels.
    Of all the beauties in the world,
    the essence of beauty does not exist.

    The hard working old man.
    Has slaved over his job,
    to provide for his family.
    There were always bills to pay.
    Of all the things he worked hard for,
    the essence of beauty is the smile on his daughters face when he leaves for work.

    The secret admirer, madly in love.
    Who stares at the mountains in spring,
    thinking of her.
    He wonders how to tell of his love.
    Of all these flowers filling the mountains with beauty,
    the essence of love lies within his beloved.




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      Your poem artfully reveals the multitude and complexity of human experience, where each individual has highly different motivations and feelings. We all view and feel things differently, and yet, also the same....

    Excellent reflective poetic work! You have written this with much sensitivity and artistic passion..

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2011-04-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the way you pinpointed several different lifestyles and what beauty means to them although I don't know if i like the way the last statement is made.... it seems bland when it speaks of beauty. Maybe if the word order was revised (I'm probably being entirely too picky). Thanks for sharing, I really enjoyed it!
    | Posted on 2010-01-22 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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