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In This Moment I'm Lost Forever


Author: faideddarkness
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
Elite Ratio:    6.5 - 102 /56 /52
Words: 222
Class/Type: Lyrics /Passion
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lol i wrote half of this while driving cause it was in my head this finished the rest when i got to my shop cause ya my thoughts are gone if i wait to write them.


In This Moment I'm Lost Forever



As I stand here looking out
Across the horizon
She’s rising from the sea
From the grip of the ocean
I dare not look away
In hopes that she would stay
And to forget
I will never

Looking into the sky
All the stars staring down
Watching tear drops from the moon
Begin falling to the ground
I dare not turn around
I dare not make a sound
In this moment
I’m lost forever
(I’m lost forever)


Then the wind
Brings in the rain
There’s no sadness
There’s no pain
The sun may not shine
But it’s peaking out
Rays of gladness
There’s no doubt
Leaves are falling
With all there colors
In this moment
I’m lost forever
In this moment
I’m lost forever


And her eyes like the skies
Staring inside of me
Her hand reaching through
Pulling my soul free
I dare not tell her no
I dare not let her go
Into her
I’m lost forever
(I’m lost forever)

Then the wind
Brings in the rain
There’s no sadness
There’s no pain
The sun may not shine
But it’s peaking out
Rays of gladness
There’s no doubt
Leaves are falling
With all there colors
In this moment
I’m lost forever
In this moment
I’m lost forever




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  Okay, after reading your last piece i definitely like this one alot better. it still has the"lost without her" theme, but it is done with alot of different imagery, which is nice. It helps to illustrate the point.
Good overall timing, the only part that didnt seem to flow as naturally:

And her eyes like the sky
She’s starring into me
Then she reaches through
Pulling my soul to be free



With that being said though, realize that if i'm nitpicking, then there's not a whole lot to find wrong about this piece.
| Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful lyrics.. I can definitely say that they grabbed my heart strings and tugged.. I did notice a typo or two and thought I would mention them to you..
The first line of the first stanza:

"As I stand her looking out"

Is that supposed to be her or here?

Also the second line of the fourth stanza:

"She’s starring into me"

I think it is staring...
| Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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