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As I stand here looking out Across the horizon She’s rising from the sea From the grip of the ocean I dare not look away In hopes that she would stay And to forget I will never Looking into the sky All the stars staring down Watching tear drops from the moon Begin falling to the ground I dare not turn around I dare not make a sound In this moment I’m lost forever (I’m lost forever) Then the wind Brings in the rain There’s no sadness There’s no pain The sun may not shine But it’s peaking out Rays of gladness There’s no doubt Leaves are falling With all there colors In this moment I’m lost forever In this moment I’m lost forever And her eyes like the skies Staring inside of me Her hand reaching through Pulling my soul free I dare not tell her no I dare not let her go Into her I’m lost forever (I’m lost forever) Then the wind Brings in the rain There’s no sadness There’s no pain The sun may not shine But it’s peaking out Rays of gladness There’s no doubt Leaves are falling With all there colors In this moment I’m lost forever In this moment I’m lost forever |
Okay, after reading your last piece i definitely like this one alot better. it still has the"lost without her" theme, but it is done with alot of different imagery, which is nice. It helps to illustrate the point. Good overall timing, the only part that didnt seem to flow as naturally: And her eyes like the sky She’s starring into me Then she reaches through Pulling my soul to be free With that being said though, realize that if i'm nitpicking, then there's not a whole lot to find wrong about this piece. | Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ] | Beautiful lyrics.. I can definitely say that they grabbed my heart strings and tugged.. I did notice a typo or two and thought I would mention them to you.. | The first line of the first stanza: "As I stand her looking out" Is that supposed to be her or here? Also the second line of the fourth stanza: "She’s starring into me" I think it is staring... | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ] | |