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    dots Submission Name: But I Don't Exist....dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 759
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 868



    Description:
       another heart hitter......well for me atleast...yes... it's rapperish again, but who gives anymore?


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    dotsBut I Don't Exist....dots
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    Sometimes... I wish
    but i never wish
    sometimes... I breathe
    but could never breathe...
    sometimes... I feel
    but I dont exist
    because simply, you and me
    could never be....

    this is that long lost story,
    the Holocaust Story
    my heart's in debt
    my mind pays all the cost for me
    this context (is) my mind set
    and time tests me, integrity
    keep under heavily
    breathe, not even in brevity,
    (I) see, not what's next to me
    nor inside of me,
    hiding me away from
    myself, til' the page
    or maybe the day come...
    that I wish,
    but I never wish
    the I breathe
    but I never breathe
    Sometimes...I feel
    but I don't exist
    because simply, you an me
    could never be...




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