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But I Don't Exist....

Author: AeThe Lost Poet
ASL Info:    19/M/DE
Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147 /184 /122
Words: 126
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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another heart hitter......well for me atleast...yes... it's rapperish again, but who gives anymore?

But I Don't Exist....

Sometimes... I wish
but i never wish
sometimes... I breathe
but could never breathe...
sometimes... I feel
but I dont exist
because simply, you and me
could never be....

this is that long lost story,
the Holocaust Story
my heart's in debt
my mind pays all the cost for me
this context (is) my mind set
and time tests me, integrity
keep under heavily
breathe, not even in brevity,
(I) see, not what's next to me
nor inside of me,
hiding me away from
myself, til' the page
or maybe the day come...
that I wish,
but I never wish
the I breathe
but I never breathe
Sometimes...I feel
but I don't exist
because simply, you an me
could never be...

Submitted on 2010-01-21 13:36:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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