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    dots Submission Name: I'm Leavingdots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    dotsI'm Leavingdots
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    Cigarette in hand
    and a cold breeze behind me
    I sit here and hope
    you'll never find me
    I won't let you hurt me
    I won't let you see
    How much it terrifies me
    that I'm almost free
    Some time alone
    then a messed up goodbye
    I snuff out my cigarette
    and hold back a sigh
    Just one more day and then I'll be through
    I hope it works out... That's all I can do.




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      sometimes all we have left is hope,

    and on or two more drags on the cigarette, before it all gets snuffed out.
    | Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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