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I'm Leaving


Author: PhantomRose
ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /Angst
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I'm Leaving



Cigarette in hand
and a cold breeze behind me
I sit here and hope
you'll never find me
I won't let you hurt me
I won't let you see
How much it terrifies me
that I'm almost free
Some time alone
then a messed up goodbye
I snuff out my cigarette
and hold back a sigh
Just one more day and then I'll be through
I hope it works out... That's all I can do.




Submitted on 2010-01-21 14:38:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sometimes all we have left is hope,

and on or two more drags on the cigarette, before it all gets snuffed out.
| Posted on 2011-04-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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