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    dots Submission Name: The Battle Between Good and Evildots

    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 1107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1080
    Average Vote:    4.6667
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       I've been writing this forever and I thought I'd never get it on here!! I'm so glad I finally finished it!!!! ^_^

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    dotsThe Battle Between Good and Evildots

    He soars across the pitch black night
    with wings as black as coal
    He's on a mission for Satan himself
    to collect an innocent virgin soul

    This is the soul he's been searching for
    since the beginning of man
    A virgin girl with hay colored hair
    and skin so smooth and tan

    Her eyes are big and trusting
    blue as a midsummer day
    She has no idea he's coming
    coming to take her away

    All at once he reaches her
    and grabs her by the arm
    He spinns her around to face him
    and finds himself unable to do her harm

    All of a sudden he's so filled with love
    he cannot bring her pain
    Instead he takes her in his arms
    and thinks himself insane

    He knows the devil will kill him
    but he doesn't really care
    So he brings his lipps down to hers
    and runs his fingers through her hair

    He sees it in her eyes
    that she also feels the same
    So he lays her down and strokes her skin
    and forgets all of his shame

    He lays her down
    and inside her he plants his fertile seed
    It was then that the devil smiled
    for he had done his deed

    He knew the man would love the girl
    and she would love him back
    So the divil devised a plan
    as evil as his soul is black

    The man had no idea that
    when the devil claimed his soul
    He was the idiot man
    that would help him reach his goal

    The sperm that the man planted in the girl
    was unfortunately not his own
    This was the devil's child
    and he would surely make it known

    The woman sensed the evil
    as the child grew
    She knew it like she knew the sky
    or the morning dew

    Before the child can reach eight months
    she takes a skewer to her womb
    She rips the child out of her
    and seals both of their dooms

    As her life is fading
    She prays the child is dead
    And as she hears the devil scream
    it's laughter that goes through her head

    Now the devil cannot win
    with his heir dead on her floor
    She almost had time to feel some peace
    until the man burst through her door

    He sees his love is dying
    and he rushes to her side
    He vows that he will avenge her
    since thier love has been denied

    She whispers that she loves him
    as she draws her final breath
    And his heart breaks into pieces
    with the realization of her death

    He kissed her perfect forehead
    and said, "Goodbye my little dove."
    And he says a silent prayer
    as he lays a sheet across his love

    "Admit my dove into your kingdom
    of eternal light
    And never let her witness
    the evils of the night.

    Keep her pure and happy
    give her jokes to make her laugh
    and tell her that inside me
    our love will always last."

    He finishes up this prayer
    as he's soaring through the skies
    And he takes his dive straight to hell
    with hatred in his eyes

    He bursts into the chamber of
    the devil and his crew
    He pulls his sword out of it's sheath
    and slices his way through

    He slaughters every minion
    till he's in the devil's face
    And he's hit with a horrid stench
    that burns his eyes like mace

    The devil takes this opportunity
    and slams the man against the door
    The man has barely enough time to react
    before he's thrown onto the floor

    The devil is on him in a flash
    before the man can move
    And the devil begins to kick him
    and stomp him with his hooves

    The man begins to realize
    that he will never win
    He knows the devil will kill him
    and burn him for this sin

    Though before death can claim him
    the devil stops the beating
    The man opens up his eyes
    to see the devil bleeding

    A glowing sword protrudes
    from the devil's chest
    The man just stares in awe
    as the devil's blood dripps on his vest

    The devil falls before the man
    as he's struggling to his feet
    and he glances up just in time
    to see a face so sweet

    The glowing figure that killed the devil
    was none other than his love
    The beautiful girl with hay-colored hair
    that he called his dove

    With tears in his eyes he goes to her
    and falls to his bloody knees
    In quick sobbing breaths he beggs
    her, "Come back to me please"

    She pulls him to his feet
    and whispers something in his ear
    The man bursts into laughter
    and whipes away his tears

    He grabbed her hand and kissed her knuckles
    then smiled and took two steps back
    He raised his head and spread his wings;
    those wings so big and black

    He closed his eyes and held his breath
    as she came and stood before him
    She placed her hands on his chest
    and her glow began to dim

    As she stood there with her hands on his chest
    the man's feet began to glow
    And though his eyes remained closed
    the emotions on his face began to show

    The glow spread from his feet on up
    and finished with his wings
    Those wings spread wide and he was surrounded
    by a glowing ring

    The glow around himflared
    and his feet left the ground
    The girl rose up to meet him
    and glowing, they spun 'round

    The man abruptly gasped
    and threw his head far back
    And when the glowing dimmed a bit
    no more were those wings black

    He spread his wings and noticed
    those wings were now pure white
    and whereas he has followed darkness
    now he followed light

    With his love in his arms they flew from hell
    and into a bright new day
    And now that they were free
    he had one thing left to say

    "You saved me, my dove, and brought me
    from darkness into light
    and now that I am with you
    the world feels so right.

    What can I do to thank you
    and show how much I care?"
    She smiled brightly and whispered,
    "Just hold me close and love me, and then this life we'll share."

    Submitted on 2010-01-21 16:52:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A beautiful dream, of love, of forgiveness and redemption. Very well done, But this was a dream, there is a real path to the light, that is towards JESUS THE CHRIST.
    | Posted on 2011-04-24 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]

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