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    dots Submission Name: Requiem c. by ruejacobs 1/23/10 at 5:30 am dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       retrosexual at heart


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    dotsRequiem c. by ruejacobs 1/23/10 at 5:30 am dots
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    I make rather a dismal wife, I think
    But I do well as a mistress
    High maintenance doesn’t
    even begin to describe me
    Maybe a few notches amped
    And spitting curses like a harridan


    I spent last week walking the floor
    Holding the ghosts
    of wailing infants against my shoulder
    Soothing the colics of death and damage
    Nothing you could point at
    In Holmesian fashion
    Nothing you couldn’t shrug off


    And then reading sparse words illuminated blue against white
    In the glow of a stand-alone screen
    I felt it again
    That stirring I did not care to name
    Ruminating reflecting revolving


    I prayed it was merely the stomach flu
    and not butterflies
    Something harmless and easily shed
    Christ what I wouldn’t give
    to possess a hard drive instead of a heart


    Stupid virus rampaging in my mind
    Just click on Nortons or AVG and it’s gone
    Not this, anything but this
    Repellant emotion


    And a good man to boot waiting in my bed already
    Thank you, no
    I’ve read that fairy tale to the last page
    They always end in violence, you know
    With the prince squeezing her throat
    And she, hissing through torn and bloodied lips
    ‘I thought you were different’
    It is always her fault


    Ah, the screw, the shrew,
    And then it’s through




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      this is well written, rue.

    i'm looking at looking at your stuff more, and forgive me if that sounds jerky, i am.

    this is a magical, surgical section, quite haunting and blah blah blah about human honesty as Emeya would say.

    it is.

    spent last week walking the floor
    Holding the ghosts
    of wailing infants against my shoulder
    Soothing the colics of death and damage
    Nothing you could point at
    In Holmesian fashion
    Nothing you couldn’t shrug off


    And then reading sparse words illuminated blue against white
    In the glow of a stand-alone screen
    I felt it again
    That stirring I did not care to name
    Ruminating reflecting revolving


    I prayed it was merely the stomach flu
    and not butterflies
    Something harmless and easily shed


    it makes you uneasy to read that sort of stuff.
    poetry shouldn't always be comfortable .and i dig your picture humour.

    *note

    you have been noted.
    | Posted on 2010-01-24 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      
    last night, while laying in bed, for some reason the thought of requiem for a dream came to mind. and wouldn't you know, as i flicked through channels, i happened upon the movie and stayed there. seeing it again, how it was shot, was unnerving. it was erratic. and violent. and painful. and sad. like the highs and lows of addiction. it made me uncomfortable. as it should. (i think at least).

    ****

    i love that your words just come at ya. like there is no denying that they are there. right there, in your face. they are a driving force to be reckoned with. (it's nice to see your posts up there again, btw).

    ****

    anyhoo...


    | Posted on 2010-01-23 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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