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    dots Submission Name: Bought and Solddots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 562
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    Bytes: 428



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    Begin to reach out,
    Only to find nothing
    Us. Yep, nothing left of us.
    Got to hand it to you.
    Hardly hurt at all.
    Told you I was stronger than you.

    And you didn't believe me.
    No one ever does.
    Do they?

    So once again I'm in the right.
    Only to find out you're wrong
    Lessen the wound with salt.
    Don't we?




    Submitted on 2010-01-23 18:25:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i've always loved salt more than sugar, myself, my little Kelso/Lyons cub. don't back your Roush into the corner, you're a part of him, too.

    never expect anything from a man and you won't be disappointed by him.

    you are a formidable Matriarch.
    | Posted on 2010-01-31 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know this is a bit to obscure, too personal. Maybe the one you written this for finds meaning in it but I really don't. Or should I say, I don't want to? Some places are best kept private. Still don't get me wrong, I've enjoyed it, though I don't know if I've learned something from it...
    | Posted on 2010-01-25 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm..I loved it care-bear. although the beginning was a little shaky for me but you pulled it together quite nicely.
    Rachel:)
    | Posted on 2010-01-25 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      i think although you follow the "i told you so" theme, somewhere in the last stanza where you said ur right only to find them wrong....... it reminded me that its not always easy to be right .. not when what you are right about sucks.
    the questions " Do they?" and the "Don't we" .. well to me, didnt think they fit into the point.. there was a hint of sarcasm in them.. but i just cant put my finger on why i dont see them with the rest of the poem .
    keep them coming ..
    | Posted on 2010-01-25 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      the power of
    i-Told-You-So
    comes to mind when i read this misc
    very straight to the point
    without being coy at all

    who ever this is addressed to(if anyone)
    "i'd hate to be that someone in the wronging"

    very nice write

    bloodstone


    | Posted on 2010-01-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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