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She's Just

Author: xZolciaPoetryx
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She's Just

Push me down gently.
Please don't hurt
The heart that cares.
It feels so much
For those pretty brown eyes,
That seduce all that is left of me.
The beast within him knows
The weakness that does not show.
It tried to hide,
But could not resist.
All in one night,
Emotions change.
Change strong feelings.
The seducing devil eyes,
Say yes and does.
They use all of their power.
Too strong for the human body.
Bruises come out.
Screams cry out.
Screams of pain and fear.
The unwantingness of him,
Of her.
She's just.
Just another one of his victims,
He cares nothing for.

Submitted on 2010-01-23 18:31:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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