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    dots Submission Name: Naivitydots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 522
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       Haven't written in awhile, since before bootcamp. I tried writing in bootcamp but that didn't work out. I gotta type or I get writer's block.


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    dotsNaivitydots
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    Here is cold beyond imagination
    And lonely eyes reflect on glass
    Like love lost was imitation
    Reality forcing it to pass

    Much slower than grace would find
    For I wince at memories still bound
    Your voice still quivers in my mind
    And it controls all but the sound

    And I fear this void may last forever
    As recovery slows with every tick
    Longing for time we had together
    The moment lingers that ended quick

    I'm not sure where to go
    Distance won't assist me here
    I still feel uncertain though
    I'm indecisive without you near

    And I have worn this path too bare
    Forever scarred, will always entice
    Other courses are far less fair
    Temptations present a rueful vice

    I search for what I won't recognize
    But dare not stray too far from here
    This double vision would impede the wise
    Decisions take advice from fear

    And all have wounds that need some tending
    We bide our time as we heal
    Knowing due time our perfect ending
    Waisting moments though naught is real




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