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    dots Submission Name: Downpourdots

    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The sky grows cloudy
    the blue fades to black
    the noises all rowdy
    hope, we now lack

    I walk the streets
    face turned from the sky
    each raindrop, my body greets
    and I always wonder why

    Why does the rain
    fall throughout the night?
    Why does 'against the grain'
    now seem right?

    We never meant to be,
    never meant to truly live
    only meant to see
    and always try to give.

    This flurry of the weather
    throughout the days
    makes us stand together
    in unusual ways

    Brotherhood in sun's absence
    we give each other a good shove
    taking thought from the rains torrents
    and fill each other with love

    We aren't meant to fight
    only to be a friend
    we're to fly the same kite
    And live our lives to their end.

    Submitted on 2010-01-24 07:24:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it, it has great meaning and I can see these things happening as you write them very good
    | Posted on 2011-09-16 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]
      and yet the rain just falls harder. I love this poem austin. it was very well done.
    | Posted on 2010-01-25 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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