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    dots Submission Name: Self Destructivedots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       it's really not all that matters

    family, friends... theyre not forever. at the end of the day.. youre on your own.

    damnit. why don't I feel like i matter here anymore?


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    dotsSelf Destructivedots
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    Broken
    Razor-sharp edges
    Cutting through all you are
    Cutting through all I am

    “Trust me
    Believe me
    Have faith in me
    Have faith”

    I say the words
    But to you
    They have no meaning
    I don’t know why I thought they would

    Self destructive
    Since the beginning of time

    But I'm finally giving up
    For I am broken
    With razor-sharp edges
    And nobody is willing

    Now-
    Neither am I




    Submitted on 2010-01-24 19:25:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm. This is a gud write
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      What a very vivid picture you draw:For I am broken
    With razor-sharp edges. I picture shards of glass that will cut the flesh with every touch. Its sad though because that thought is that now there is no fixing or reversing what has been done. Remember that glass that is handcrafted is molded and sanded so even broken shards in the right hands can be beautiful and smooth to the touch again. Yet it needs works and is very fragile you must handle with care... Ok done with my rambling lol there is a lot of emotion in this poem which is wonderful. I wish though that you used some more lines like the one above to continue to paint the picture because it is very vague. I would love to know more and I hope you the best in smoothing out the sharp edges! Anthony
    | Posted on 2010-01-24 00:00:00 | by Kersofmia | [ Reply to This ]


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