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    dots Submission Name: Honestly Hollowdots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 303
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 673
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 1655



    Description:
       I owe you readers of this site some honest writing.


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    dotsHonestly Hollowdots
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    I

    In this vivid state of extreme mental awareness
    Slowly spiraling towards dripping madness stroke
    I can see translucid beings transpiring throughout
    Every pore that reality opens to absolute power
    Mixing and melting, connecting strings, flying
    Into all mater and space, constantly driving forth
    Past or future through any present time starlapse
    Irradiating from the giant heart that beats inside us

    O

    Inside the variable point connecting all galaxies
    Hauling fingers linger on the outskirts of obscurity
    Pushing forth liquid motion through old arteries
    Making and breaking with single circular radiation
    The delicate fabric of constantly fluctuating light
    Encompassing sense and simplicity in atoms of flesh
    Glorious on every pulse of molten fury cascading in
    This hole universe, inspiring, breeding time and space

    U

    Scream desire on the highest peak a moment offers
    To perturbing eyes burning holes inside of atoms
    Captured by twinkling ears bound around sound
    Splitting reality’s signs of obscurity and remembrance
    Embrace future while past fury rumbles and flickers
    Ascend towards golden descent in gore and amber
    As sudden collision impales dream into mutiny spirit
    New realms of haunting inside your cavity lavishly open




    Submitted on 2010-01-25 18:25:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think deep down, our subconscious won't let us write without honesty...no matter how much we try to camouflage our real feelings...or bury them in words.

    nice oxymoron in the title.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i owe you one retarded thing too just to piss off that piss that you call pissing on my page by calling me a retard and for all the tard ation in the world i think someone who goes by the handle paradox would have a little more to think than to randomly attack someone for being a retard when they have no real concept of what re- tard- ation- is and if you think your history books like dictionaries might help go fu-ck your self and then tell your cock that it has a hand.. and you will be about as retarded as you already think other people are and all the problems for the retards out there will be solved be cause there will be a retard who is willing to be re- tarded for them and they will all go da-da over you maybe even ask you if you like the paintings that they make that confuse you because they are too realist...
    | Posted on 2010-01-29 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      The IOU break was cute. Because of how large a scale this seems, to encompass, it makes understanding it a little difficult to grasp. However you do have a very nice way with words; each word slipped into the next word smoothly. Thanks for sharing-
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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