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    dots Submission Name: Falling to Daybreakdots
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    Author: Raindrops
    ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184/213/288
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    Description:
       Written on January 25, 2010.


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    dotsFalling to Daybreakdots
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    Falling inside me
    drowning in nothings
    all these feelings
    these thoughts are fleeting

    Driving me crazy
    Don't know to run
    Don't know to hide
    Left out in the open..

    to comprehend
    What's going on
    inside my head.
    So annoying

    When I can't think of this
    when life isn't bliss
    When is it ever?
    Will this last forever?

    Tired of running
    Tired of fighting
    Pull these evil thoughts from me ..

    tired eyes searching
    deaf ears listening
    for that something...for that break
    ugh! I don't know what I'm saying...

    what I'm thinking....
    I don't understand
    why this is happening.....
    but WHAT is happening

    Things are falling apart
    falling through my fingers
    Losing it all
    so that I'm left

    with just You.

    Walls falling around me
    Floors crumbling beneath me
    Looks like I'm falling
    I'm falling!!

    I can't control this
    Nothing to hold on to....
    but You...
    falling into Your arms

    I guess this is how it ends
    but it doesn't end...

    It begins.




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      I think I've had this feeling before... like everything is wrong and your life is crumbling, only to find out that that was not the right life. Then when you look back you realize that it all had a purpose, but that you had to lose everything to find the right path.

    I feel the frustration and fear in your words, but also the realization that there's more to life. :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-26 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]
      A new write, and a very mysterious one. This one describes the hopeless feeling of falling; something I think we all have at times, and in our dreams. Your poem reminds me too of the frustration we have at lack of control over so many things, where we wish for order and life gives uncertainty and disorder, and random surprises that we would rather not have!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2010-01-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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