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    dots Submission Name: Personal Delusiondots
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    Author: MissUsagi
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Me
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       Written after betrayed by a friend.
    Written before begging for love.
    Written during my sister's speech on cats.
    Written while composing an ugly song.
    Written by Miss Usagi. Alone and sad.


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    dotsPersonal Delusiondots
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    Hmm.
    Maybe I'm just paranoid.
    I'm surrounded by whoever you are.
    Who are you?

    Let me run away.
    Let me find someone who cares.
    Let's see who really does.
    Someone who won't just walk away and pretend it's all fine.
    Who are you? Who am I?

    I don't know.
    Do you know? Do you? Do you...?
    Give me a cup of poisoned tea. How about a coffee?
    No, thanks. It makes my heart race.
    Like how I am when I'm beside you.
    No, like how I am when I'm around you.

    Love stolen by someone who was thought a friend.
    A made up love to deceive my enemies.
    Love
    it is
    so hard to
    find that I
    made one up
    and now I'm
    living
    in a
    web
    of
    lies.

    I'll wait for you to save me.
    Will the day ever come?
    Nope.
    I'm sure of it.
    I know it.

    Let me go insane.
    Let me live in my perfect delusion.
    Let me slash my skin so that blood comes seeping through.
    Is this real?
    Is this true?
    Are you really going to love me?
    No.
    You won't.
    Will you?
    I'll lie on my bed and think about it.

    --Then I fall asleep.
    Is this all a dream?
    Wake me up. I'm living a nightmare...




    Submitted on 2010-01-25 23:05:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Good writing.
    Sad too,
    and I'm sorry about your friend,
    I hope you find some one better than them,
    and don't worry
    whatever they did to you
    will come back to them
    Karma is a [censored] after all
    :P
    But yea.
    keep writing
    :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by kimirin | [ Reply to This ]


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