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bordem first series

Author: every48seconds
ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
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i just wanted his here

bordem first series

okay , so this is about, truly nothing to be honest
simply a part of imagination that needs to become a reality
so i believe i should right this down, whatever this may be
this may be a letter, or a note
or simply a awkward speech to oneself in order to pass the time,
but none the less, this is something
like all things, this is something
that is undeniable
To say this isn't real is naive, and quiet frankly rude
no one is to judge existence something ,even this
without first examining and judging themselves
and that is something far beyond natural human ideal
beyond our ideals...
So what you may as is this about
this is a simply writing
or something in the attempts of wanting to be a writing
stating that it, like many things
things forgotten,lost,discarded
or just hidden real well
are still there , we're all still here
and no it's not that we don't want to talk, but we want you to talk
you to respond, you to state whats wrong
whats right...whats left
it's simple as that in truth
open your eyes and you find life, and if not life
then existence

so as this comes to a close
without any real meaning nor form
recall that it is form, just free of comprehension
and that my dear dear accumulation of atoms

Is a beautiful thing

Submitted on 2010-01-25 23:26:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love this! It makes the reader think and think hard which is something lacking from most thing anymore. I like the rambling trippy flow you had to it as well it was just different. Just clean up a lil of th gramatical stuff . . . though I wouldnt clean it all up cause its raw and adds a lil to the personality of the piece. Awsome piece, keep writing.

| Posted on 2010-01-26 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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