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    dots Submission Name: Over the Mountaindots
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    Author: crashley
    Elite Ratio:    0.43 - 3/26/100
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOver the Mountaindots
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    I climbed over that mountain
    hand over hand,
    my breath always catching
    "I'll make it over"
    I continued after each crumbling step
    I learned to bow my head,
    I'll endure your criticism
    Is it control or protection?
    I wish I could discern the two

    I've kept to myself,
    I separated from those I loved
    So lost on the soft words whispered in the night,
    I would do anything for you
    Yet when you're truly all I have,
    when you achieved your goal
    I find you're not there

    All I know is that for you,
    I climbed over that mountain
    Damned myself to isolation,
    and I'm in its shadow alone
    Sooner or later I'll make the climb back
    I don't want to do it alone




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