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    dots Submission Name: Iíve made up my mind about youdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 543
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1011



    Description:
       Written for this guy in my english class who really wants me to go out with him.

    He's sweet but i just dont know.


    This is about the best i've written for a while, which says what for my writting career?

    i've resorted to simple stanza and fixed ryhme and shitty first person - i will say exaclty what i want to and pretend its good - style.

    :(

    haha whatever i dont care


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    dotsIíve made up my mind about youdots
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    Iíve made up my mind about you
    Iím done Ė I want you Ė out of my life
    But still you follow me around Ė a curse
    The grim reaper with his scythe

    Iíve made up my mind about you
    Iím going to ask you to go home
    But before I open up my mouth to hurt you
    I dread the thought of being alone

    Iíve made up my mind about you
    But still I keep you tagging along
    I know what Iím doing Ė Its bad Ė Its terrible
    But I think I might be leading you on

    Iíve made up my mind about you
    We should just be friends
    So, maybe I like you Ė I think I do
    But Iíll hurt you in the end

    Iíve made up my mind about you
    I wonít break you like that
    I insult you Ė push you away
    But you keep coming back

    Iíve made up my mind about you
    Iíve got nothing left to lose
    If Iíve made up my mind about you,
    Why am I so confused?






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      This piece really makes me think about particular feelings within my own life. What do I do? How do I handle my own feelings? I have been struggling with those questions for quite some time now, a really long time now. Sigh.. This is not fair. -but then again, what would be considered fair? Nothing? Everything? Meh, why even bother to try to answer those questions. No point, right? Aah! Stop asking questions!! Questions are never helpful. -scratch that. ...they are usually not helpful, especially in these types of situations. Feelings do provoke questions; however, pure feelings are the only real concern when one is at a cross roads. Such a cross roads concerning another person to which one is confused about potential feelings for requires the awareness of one's feelings. Yes, most of the time they do not make much real sense. However, they exist and therefore cannot be ignored. I am such a hypocrite. -even I ignore them. I admire you for not ignoring them. It will help. It probably has helped you, even in the slightest bit. I should not assume. Everything you explained within this piece I can relate to. -perhaps not on the exact same level, but pretty close. I have no answers. All I have is pure feelings.

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    | Posted on 2010-02-03 00:00:00 | by misschalloner | [ Reply to This ]


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