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    dots Submission Name: Human Naturedots
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    Author: smexybabe0101
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 25/31/66
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHuman Naturedots
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    Why in life do we hold onto to the people that donít care?
    And push away the people that truly do?
    Even when you know,
    From the start,
    That that person doesnít want you,
    Never will...
    Why do we hold on?


    While on the other hand,
    Thereís a wonderful person,
    With their arms open wide,
    Convincing you,
    Securing you,
    But all you do is shove them away.
    Why do we do that?


    Some people donít care,
    But you lean towards them,
    And dodge the people that really do care,
    The ones that want to see you happy,
    Not the one that doesnít care what happens,
    The one that doesnít do anything for your wellbeing.

    Humans,
    And our nature.
    We do not make sense.
    Do we?




    Submitted on 2010-01-26 12:24:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i would say by the looks of it , it is very conversational, but what i would also say is that it could go in more clearly defined chunks or it could be blended more, either way one way or the other and time...
    | Posted on 2010-01-30 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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