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    dots Submission Name: Farewell.dots

    Author: smexybabe0101
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 25/31/66
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    The words I echoed into your ears...
    I love you forever.

    I guess forever is over.

    The words I whispered into your ears...
    Youíre the only one for me.

    Well youíre definitely not.

    The words I spoke into your ears,
    Iíd never let you go.

    Well, goodbye,
    This is me letting you go.
    And all the memories that come with you.
    The good and the bad.
    I donít want them anymore.
    Take them back.

    My heartís still in my chest,
    Beating, surviving,
    It never needed you,
    And it never will need you.
    I will never need you again.

    Submitted on 2010-01-26 12:33:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem should be titled iar.

    For if you feel this way now, then you never truley felt it before.
    | Posted on 2010-01-29 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cute & very creative but it lacks the emotion you felt when you wrote it. However I am in the same boat and I feel the same way about my lover but, but theirs a little lite in my heart where it doesn't seem to let go! Oh well again nice poem cute concept keep it up :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]

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