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    dots Submission Name: Fantasy Landdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsFantasy Landdots
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    Let me take you to fantasy land
    Close our eyes and hold each other hands
    Where all your fantasies come true
    Well the both of ours do
    Where we can walk down chocolate milk way lane
    And watch the Oreo shaped fish swim
    Where the king and queen
    Show us where they live
    Castle made of all kinds of our favorite candy
    A cake nestled in-between
    Where hugs and kisses are always warm
    And the land is always clean
    Where marshmallow horses takes us for a ride
    And grows wings to take flight
    Shows us the land from above
    And only what controls all this is love
    Love that we share
    Love that knows we care
    Love drives everything
    Said the queen and king…




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      Good stuff man I liked the images, candy castles and oreos, marshmellow horses, i'd sy this poem was fun to write.
    -Craig
    | Posted on 2010-02-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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