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    dots Submission Name: My Shielddots
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    Author: smexybabe0101
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 25/31/66
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy Shielddots
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    A smile is proudly placed in the middle of my face,
    A friend hooked around both my arms,
    A happy looking face placed on my neck,
    A laugh pouring out of my mouth...
    A shield covering me.

    A shield that is not penetrable,
    Your words,
    Your actions,
    Your ignorance,
    They will never affect me.
    I wonít let them affect me because you donít deserve to.

    You donít deserve to have anything to do with me,
    You donít deserve to see a frown on my face,
    You donít deserve to put a frown on my face,
    To me, you deserve nothing.
    But to get your heart broken and trodden on,
    Like you did to me.

    I will never treat anyone like you treated me,
    I know how it feels to have your heart pounded,
    Until your world is crashing around you,
    Shatters of it slashing my arms,
    Causing more and more pain as time goes by.
    Then one day, I realize.
    Why do I let you get to me?
    Then I put up my shield,
    Held my friends close,
    And promised myself never to let you in,
    Ever again.




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