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    dots Submission Name: cigarettes and fiction like a say-oncedots
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    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       i like to think of this one like i would think of a ship sinking, like hey lets keep the song going that version would be Gothic so what ever they play is Gothic titanic the imply but what tunes they are said to have played i would say are goth... poetic gp


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    dotscigarettes and fiction like a say-oncedots
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    Tobacco the effort, like inhale, must inhale, must breathe
    The effort must expel must expel must expel the greasy tar
    And yellow orange stains
    Fingers like clamps on my own throat

    Zombie glowing in the boxes,
    Like eyes chewing on apples
    Like eyes chewing on apples
    Like lips about to scorch the cheek of death
    Then lick the tip of the scythe
    Like some appetite for self destruction

    Vampire, wolf, and the made up composite of a man , the monsters we are
    And more, the demons, the lore of men and gods,
    The fiction of Lovecraft or Poe, the shallow depths of the soul of man
    Are
    Filled to prove they are deep
    Only to find we keep them shallow so we do not drown
    Down down down
    Into the abyss




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