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    dots Submission Name: ideas of a girldots
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    Author: xxdellybooxx
    ASL Info:    17 female killaloe
    Elite Ratio:    1.34 - 1/4/5
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 860
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsideas of a girldots
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    she sits there quietly thinking to herself
    thinking of times when she wasnt afaird
    thinking of times when she didnt always cry
    thinking of times when nothing was in the way
    thinking of times when she didnt have to fake a smile
    thinking of times when she didnt feel dead inside
    thinking of ways to stop all this sorrow
    eg.killing/hurting herself
    but nothing even death could stop her pain
    she only wanted to change for him
    to change the way she felt
    to change what she had done
    to change what she had said
    to change everything that had happened
    tears fell her face as she quietly whispered

    "why me"




    Submitted on 2010-01-28 10:54:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanks so much i really appricate that
    | Posted on 2010-03-02 00:00:00 | by xxdellybooxx | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great piece and has a good flow and rythem to it. I love the fact it has basic pattern through the first half and then in the middle and stop and turn point that doesnt fit the pattern and fads into a similar but different pattern in the words it gives a great mental picture of the emotion and mindset of the subject. I can relate to this as well. Powerfull piece, keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2010-01-30 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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