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    dots Submission Name: Forgotton Farewelldots
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    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 585
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       Haven't written in a LONG time. Lets hope the skill isn't lost


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    dotsForgotton Farewelldots
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    Tormented mistress,
    godforesaken land.
    Unfullfiled agendas,
    death sleeps in my hand.
    Forgotten for so long,
    lost yet still found.
    Look up towards the moon,
    bellow out like a hound.
    The mind holds no refuge,
    and my heart never could.
    I've found what i wanted,
    but let it burn in the woods.
    So father forgive me.
    judge me not for my sins.
    Foresaken me no more,
    make easy my end.
    Let go of my soul,
    may my weary mind rest.
    Have pitty on me,
    or turn round like the rest.




    Submitted on 2010-01-29 14:26:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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