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    dots Submission Name: Love is an Ocean Shoredots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Random piece about oceans...and love


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    dotsLove is an Ocean Shoredots
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    Love is an ocean shore,
    A beautiful paradise.
    A scene that captures a lot more,
    Than just your wandering eyes.

    Predictable at first.
    Waves come and go; but
    As you stand longer, it comes stronger.
    Then you suddenly know

    That itís not as predictable,
    As you once thought.
    Premature waves have come and gone,
    And suddenly you are caught

    In a whole new confusing level,
    Deeper depth, higher tide.
    You wonder how you can conquer it,
    But you find yourself peculiarly abide.

    You are now sunken and drunken in it,
    You can now never be apart.
    For the water came running, claiming you,
    Just as love claimed your heart.




    Submitted on 2010-01-29 14:45:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is good. I'm a big fan of anything ocean. Nice, how you liken love to the oceans tide.

    Reads and sounds good... except, I think this line needs rewording. Doesn't quite make sense as is-- >"But you find yourself peculiarly abide"

    "For the water came running, claiming you,
    Just as love claimed your heart.
    "-- good ending.
    | Posted on 2010-01-29 00:00:00 | by AnnaMolly | [ Reply to This ]


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