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    dots Submission Name: Cry (Linger)dots

    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsCry (Linger)dots

    Now we’re done
    We are finally through
    You have won
    Now you can do what you want too
    I’ll be fine standing here

    My shattered heart
    Blows with the willow
    Hope I drown tonight
    On my pillow

    Window is open and it feels good outside
    Window is open and laughter I hear
    Everyone’s playing as I laid here and cried
    Maybe I should join them to get my mind clear
    Such beautiful weather outside
    Such a beautiful sky
    To much going on
    For me to linger and cry…

    Submitted on 2010-01-29 18:10:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dude dig the four middle lines drown on a pillow, awesome
    more i would say maybe thin out the top and fatten the bottom and get a poem that can be shaped in text like a teardrop...
    just a thought...
    | Posted on 2010-01-29 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      When roads get rough its good to find something that would distracted you mind even from just a bad day. I like that even though that you started off with a bad setting you look on to find something that would drag your thoughts somewhere else where you don’t have to ponder on such things. It was well written keep up the work.

    | Posted on 2010-01-29 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]

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