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    dots Submission Name: the outer laws and the land of Taoist immortalsdots

    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Prose/Legend
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       puff the magic dragon anyone?

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    dotsthe outer laws and the land of Taoist immortalsdots

    The opium den
    A dark, stale, and hard-aired place…
    Stolen under ghetto stairs
    Red and padded with cement…
    Paper lanterns and blades
    They smoke and rage until only there is red..
    The long pipes are left on the floor and honor blades
    Are run
    Inquisition of the stench…
    Death… the smell so rotten
    Plague of flies…
    Spirit like a dragon… caged in the room…
    What reflex the world must be…
    The small sculpture, the dragon, carved.. of media…
    The dragon carved and waiting...
    And more
    Or less
    And more…
    Somewhere in the underground of city
    The den…
    Some men call the den the devils playground
    And some men say they know when they are in the devils den
    But some men shred documents to piss the old goat off…
    People are strange… myth is stranger…
    The stranger of history…
    Myth they would say
    If theory quotes fiction…

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      Crazy and spooky. I like the beat to this. Catchy. Stays in yer head, that's for sure.

    Just some breezing-by thoughts.
    | Posted on 2010-01-30 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]

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