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    dots Submission Name: Endless Running : Dead Enddots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 711
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    Description:
       Yes I stole the first line from robert frost. But it inspired me. This wasnt meant for each reader to have the same interpretation as I had while writing it so I'd love to hear what meaning those who take the time to read find in it for themselves. Thanks.


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    dotsEndless Running : Dead Enddots
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    Two roads diverged in a wood, and I -
    I stood staring at the fork.

    The first unsteady in footing
    ever changing from warmth, perfection
    to harsh ice and snow.
    A path took multiple times through adolescence
    and attempted once in adulthood - but it ran.
    My feet would fall comfortably
    upon its uncertain touraine.
    Its journey leading to lime light. . .
    or devistation. . .
    mayhap even happiness.

    The second lay out adjacent to familiarity
    A new choice freshly revealed.
    The yellow wood of a novel begining
    shadowing the pine floor beneath.
    warm sunlight floods through the ceiling
    and yet looks can decive -
    the only way to know is to continue
    upon its unplotted mystery.

    I take my first step . . .




    Submitted on 2010-01-29 23:53:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm...well, I can take this a lot of different ways, and because I know you, I think I might have an idea about what this is about for you. For me it signifies a choice to go down a destructive path I've gone down before, but in a weird way makes me happy. The other is a new option that has opened up for me, that I'll tell you about not publicly haha. Anyway, this write is very good, excellent flow and the imagery is perfect.
    | Posted on 2010-01-30 00:00:00 | by DarkGunslinger | [ Reply to This ]


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