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    dots Submission Name: peacefull reflections part 11: the end dots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 504
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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       I posted the end a while back and it was just brought to my attention thats not all that was in the post so here is just the ending. sorry


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    dotspeacefull reflections part 11: the end dots
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    XI


    It came upon Kaylee's last night. She had visited nearly everyone in town and still was no closer to an answer than she had been that day at the lake. She entered the dream of a guy she had known a few years now, Ian. There was nothing going on inside this dream though. When she entered all she saw was green grass and a small stream running through the missle of everything. Sitting beneath a tree near the steams edge was Ian. She walked over and beside him. "Hi." She didn't really know what to say, as much as she had done this, she still got cold feet. "Hi."


    "Can I ask you a question? "


    "You mean another one, cause you just did." He smiled, he always had been a smart ass.


    "Ok yeh another one."



    "Go ahead."


    "Do you. . .. do you think suicide is a sin? "


    He just sat there for a minuet before he replied. " Well I guess that would depend on the person, but no I don't necessarily think it's a sin. That doesn't mean I would condone it though. No matter how bad life gets it beats the hell out of the alternative."


    "What do you mean 'the alternative', it you don't think it's a sin then why would it be a bad alternative?"


    "Well, if it is a sin, hell don't sound like a good place to be, and if it's not and you go to heaven, everything is perfect and to me that sounds really boring. And if there's nothing well then that's it. "


    "I guess that makes since."


    " Personally I think I'll just stay here as long as I can."


    "Yeh , thanks Ian. " She stood up and left his dream at a dead run.


    She didn't come out where she had expected though. Kaylee was back in that room that wasn't really a room.


    "Your three days are up Kaylee. Have you got the answer to your question now?"


    "Not exactly, " She was thinking hard about what Ian had said to her, " I still don't know if it's a sin, but I do know that I made the wrong decision. I guess no one really knows for sure what's right and wrong or what religion is true but I guess you have to try as long as you can on earth just in case. But I guess it's to late to relies that now."


    "Maybe not Kaylee. . . "


    He said more but the voice was slowly fading away. She opened her eyes to the sunlight breaking through the hospital window. "Daddy?" He looked up, tears running down his face, and they embraced




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