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    dots Submission Name: adnamadots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsadnamadots
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    if all should be in the rake of my nails
    in the whispers of my finger tips
    if pressed close to yours
    the succulent mouth
    and breath deep on desire
    and never appeased
    should I lay waste to your soul
    and burn in your fire
    devour
    be eaten by my own passion
    and lay myself at your feet
    such storms I have
    in the dreams of fired night
    that lay burning upon your pillow
    while you sleep




    Submitted on 2010-01-30 18:26:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thank you I appreciate your comment
    | Posted on 2010-01-31 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems to me that you're tryin to describe the passion you have for someone in a description of fire. this piece is very unique but i believe it could have more potential if you made this a little longer but overall great work
    | Posted on 2010-01-30 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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