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    dots Submission Name: Confused Heartdots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 987
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1384



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    dotsConfused Heartdots
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    I should be strong,
    Able to move on,
    I assume this to be okay,
    Considering we lasted so long,
    Why must I hold on,
    This need for control,
    Is taking its toll,
    It's breaking me every single day.

    In the end,
    I look the fool,
    In the end,
    I'm the one who's confused,
    Your soul and mine,
    In the end,
    I have no idea what I really intend,
    I want you,
    Only cause I hate you,
    Is that as sick as it is masochistic.

    I ache,
    So why can't you,
    Everyone loves you still,
    No matter how much you've lied,
    No matter how much you've batterd me inside,
    I just want you to honestly feel,
    1,10th of sorrow, agony and grief.

    So I'm a confused heart,
    So what,
    I'm trying so hard,
    To relish in this pain,
    Instead it's living on inside my brain,
    If only I could forgive,
    If only I wasn't so scorned,
    That i'm tourcherd with each thought,
    So i'm a confused heart,
    I want good but I relaliate accidently,
    Cause my heart is ice cold,
    Where's the right Dr. or the right pill,
    To thaw it out,
    Sorry but for now,
    I'm just a confused heart.




    Submitted on 2010-02-01 11:52:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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