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    dots Submission Name: I Left Youdots
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    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsI Left Youdots
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    It's your fault you know?
    You messed it all up
    You hit me
    And didn't repent
    You said
    "It is the way I am
    And I am not going to change"
    So two days later
    I had to leave
    I couldn't handle it
    I couldn't deal

    I can't believe I blamed it on myself
    I can't beleive I said it was my fault
    It really wasn't
    It was yours

    You said you loved me
    But how can that be true?
    If you love someone you don't hit them
    You don't yell at them
    Not if you truly love them

    So...
    I am glad I never loved you
    Because in all actuality you never loved me

    That's why
    I Left You




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      This is a powerful piece and I can relate to this in so many ways. It hurts to find out that what you thought was love, was not, and it hurts even more when those feelings make you realise you were being used.

    The stanza's are not patterned, but then again the story is not in a pattern, its in a slow decline in to depression, which is powerful as each stanza has less and less, showing the degrading non-existant love
    | Posted on 2010-02-11 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]
      knowing what tht kind of relationship is like........thank you
    | Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by Alilia | [ Reply to This ]
      this is veery sad it made me cry a little
    | Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by angelagresham19 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this poem is so...impowering in a way. As if you were taking a stand. It gives hope. I really like the tone in this poem. the speaker of this poem (whoever that maybe) is a very inspiring person. :)
    | Posted on 2010-02-01 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]


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