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    dots Submission Name: These Words Will Do.dots

    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 465
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       for someone. that's swept me off my feet.

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    dotsThese Words Will Do.dots

    i slip ya mind,
    i slip in space,
    my marks can't be erased,
    seeping blood and tears,
    i've been here for years,
    fore score and a little more,
    it'll take you on a little tour,
    to places i ain't even been before,
    gimme ten more little blinks,
    ten little steps,
    little bets,
    bet you i can see it too,
    traces of world 'neath your shoes,
    couples should travel in twos,
    sorry don't mean to make you choose,
    between those who don't see,
    who only way "it should be you and me",
    or a man who'll have nothing left to lose if he loses you,
    sing it true.
    you chose me and i do you,
    full inside your eyes I'm hypnotized,
    let alone when I'm in your thighs,
    and then i send,
    the key,
    for me,
    to be,
    the one,
    who'll mend,
    the tears,
    that lie,
    in your eyes.
    i won't be like other guys,
    at least i damn will try,
    to never make you sigh in the melancholy of what used to be.
    something new,
    i'll give you.
    i could go on forever,
    write another letter,
    sail it sea to sea,
    but i shouldn't,
    stop i normally wouldn't,
    out come the words,
    when just these will do,
    "Girl, I Love You".

    Submitted on 2010-02-01 20:36:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. that was sweet and very cute!
    i <3 it:)

    | Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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